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67835 No. 67835
hi, I've been wanting to write a yukkuri story but I'm an extremely poor writer but i will try my best. any help/criticism is appreciated. First things first: character creation
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[]Yukkuri
[]Human

>> No. 67839
[x]Yukkuri

Sup HY
>> No. 67840
[X] GTFO
>> No. 67841
[x]Human

And then we'll play as a guy with a bottomless stomach who must always eat
>> No. 67842
[X]Human

Alright, I'll bite.
>> No. 67844
[x] Human.

Being the yukkuri never works out.
>> No. 67845
[X] Yukkuri

Vote it easy!
>> No. 67852
Well, I hope your all prepared for little to no writing a horrible story and poor grammar and spelling.
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[X]Human
After a long and hot summer night you are awakened by the sun and the sounds of birds singing. You get dressed and decide to....
[]Wash you face(hygiene is important)
[]Make breakfast(Your stomach MUST BE FILLED!)
[]Go out(select destination plz)
>> No. 67853
[x]Yukkuri

I wholly expect this story to get plagued with votespam if Human wins.
>> No. 67854
Come on, you aren't even trying.
>> No. 67858
>>67854
sry this is my first time and im nervous
if its not acceptable please ignore my first attempt and i'll try again when there are more votes
>> No. 67859
2/10

+1 for the attempt
+1 for the picture

But seriously, try harder.
>> No. 67861
[]Make breakfast(Your stomach MUST BE FILLED!)

Also. Are you VIVI?
>> No. 67863
Look.

You can't even be arsed to use proper capitalization. Any story you write is going to be shit.

Do you think we care if this is your first attempt, or your second, or your third? Do you think we care if you're nervous? No. All we care about is if the story is good--WELL-WRITTEN--or not. We're not going to offer leeway. We're not going to say, "Ohhhh, it's his first time, I suppose we should ignore the fact that his story is so terrible."

No.

If you're an "extremely poor writer", learn to write better, and then come back and try again.
>> No. 67868
You wake up on to the sounds of birds and cicadas chirpping. Its been half a year since arriving here in Gensokyo after getting lost during a camping trip. Living alone in a small house by a stream you live walking distance to the village but far enough so that it would be a bother to walk to your home on a whim. To make money you sell vegetables from your garden and fish that you catch. You don't really need it but it's always good to have some right? You know almost everyone's name and are on good terms but you aren't really close to anyone. You hop out of bed and get dressed putting on a pair of jeans and a clean shirt. After you wash your face in the stream. Heading back inside you ....
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[]Water your garden
[]Make breakfast(Your stomach MUST BE FILLED!)+1
[]Go out(select destination please)
[]Do something else
>>67861
No, I am new to the board
>> No. 67873
[]Water your garden

I miss the second Yukkuri story on /others/. What happened to that writefag? The story was superb, with the protagonist walking between civilised and mad yukkuri researcher.
>> No. 67875
>>67873
According to one of the last posts in the last thread, woden was actually HY. I never saw him admit it since I don't go on IRC, but if woden was HY that explains where he went.

>>67868
VIVI is someone from pooshlmer.
>> No. 67879
>>67875
>According to one of the last posts in the last thread, woden was actually HY

Huh. That explains why it had nice quality and was pretty good for a yukkuri based story.

Hey, if HY finished writing SDM:Hacked Modo, then he can write the Yukkuri story too! He always wrote two at the same time...
>> No. 67884
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67884
>You wake up on to the sounds of birds and cicadas chirpping.
>cicadas chirpping
Made me think of this.

Anyone else besides me afraid of what U.N.Owen is going to do to us in his story when he finally finishes that show?
>> No. 67885
>>67873
Yeah. I miss that story also. It was interesting following the story and observing the character's development through the interactions that he encountered .
>> No. 67886
>>67873
Yeah. I miss that story also. It was interesting following the story and observing the character's development through the interactions that he encountered .
>> No. 67887
>>67885
...

It'll be back, in time.

For now, good luck with this story. I would suggest getting yourself a tripcode.
>> No. 67900
>>67887
>Hungry Youkai!GGKI3UTr5s
>That's it for tonight, too sleepy for another update. Back tomorrow!
gb2/bed/
>> No. 67957
>>67868
>No, I am new to the board

You're proving my point.
Do you know what belongs on the end of that sentence?
Here's a hint: it's between the , and / keys.
I know it's an unfamiliar key to you, but it's a must if you're WRITING A STORY.

That is, unless you want it to turn out to be shit.

Oh, too late!
>> No. 67964
With all this... Strange stories and writers appearing from nowhere, I feel myself a bit eager to write. But well, it probably won't turn out well anyways...
>> No. 67975
>>67964
>But well, it probably won't turn out well anyways..
Then write, but keep it to yourself. If you honestly don't think it's good, don't share it. If you aren't OP then this applies to OP as well. Do not start a story on here unless you're willing to put the work into it. Do not start a story unless you're reasonably convinced you can make it interesting. Do not start a story just because it seems like the cool thing to do.

And OP specifically; if you really want to write a yukkuri story, write a regular yukkuri story and post it on /jp/ or pooshlmer. There's no need to adopt the CYOA format. Plus they're more tolerant of poor writing.
>> No. 67979
>>67975
>If you honestly don't think it's good, don't share it.

I sure do feel tempted to listen to this piece of advice...
>> No. 67983
>>67979
Since other people do seem to enjoy your work, I'd suggest not listening to it.
>> No. 67984
>>67975

>>67975

>Plus they're more tolerant of poor writing.

Compared to here? wut?
>> No. 67991
>pooshlmer
>more tolerant of poor writing.

That's news to me.
>> No. 67993
>>67991
Did you go on the yukkuri threads there? I saw a good number of OC that was just retarded.

Plus, IMO, the writing quality of most japanese (based on the translations; I can't read jap) yukkuri stories/images was really bad.
>> No. 67995
>>67993

No, I don't, because I hate yukkuri. It's a shit fad/meme/whateverthefuck it's supposed to be and all related material is shit by association.
>> No. 67997
>>67995
Then maybe only yukkuri threads on there had shit OC. I only went on pooshlmer's yukkuri threads, so I don't know what goes on in the rest of the board.
>> No. 67999
I have no idea what OP stands for even though I've been reading here for more than half a year. I'm guessing OP stands for something like a thread starter and if that's the case, no.

With that aside, I wouldn't actually say that I'm a horrible writer but I'm not exactly a great writer too. I'm just not too sure about where I stand and what others would think of the ideas. I guess I'll just start writing for some other stuff elsewhere before I think about a Touhou CYOA. Worried about screwing up so I guess if it's something else, it wouldn't be that bad.
>> No. 68001
>>67999
Original Post[er] or Picture, depending on context.

>I guess I'll just start writing for some other stuff elsewhere before I think about a Touhou CYOA.
Good plan.
>> No. 68003
>>67997

I wrote there for a bit before I found THP. There was also a series of 'Bad End' threads from a long while back that most of the namefags took part in that spawned an assload of walls. Now there are some General Fiction threads that tend to get... strange. Most of the time well written, but just...
>> No. 68004
>There was also a series of 'Bad End' threads from a long while back that most of the namefags took part in that spawned an assload of walls.
As yes, the bad ends. Forgot about those. I wouldn't call those 'good' in any traditional sense, but a lot of them are so bad they're hilarious.
>> No. 68120
>>68004
>I wouldn't call those 'good' in any traditional sense,
Except for the Suika Mongol End, of course.
>> No. 68133
>>68003
Your Sakuya end was one of the best things that came from those.
Really. Somebody should pull something like that off in a CYOA.